Title:
Seize the Crown
Author:
Hieraites
Blurb:
She is the living definition of flawless. A lady with etiquette. A lady with vast knowledge. A lady with a face compared to a goddess. She was the role model for noble ladies. Evielle Mist Solairea lives the life of a perfect princess. She surpasses the expectations of aristocrats, the expectations of Solaireans; the expectations of everyone. (
🔸Editors' Feedback:
The heroine's backstory should be shortened, condensing all her goodness into one sentence; making the sudden turnaround all the more impressive.
Subtlely hints at her unbelievable and untimely death by the hands of her best friend will create great suspense.Her utter surprise and bewilderment of this shocking revelation can build tremendous tension that fuels her struggle between feelings of regret and the drive for revenge upon her eventual reborn, enticing the readers to anticipate and look forward to the kickass plot.
Title:
Oh my Princess
Author:
Evelyn Obah
Blurb:
She is strong and powerful. Ever since he met her, his life has turned into a living hell or has it? Dickson hated himself so much for being a weakling and he hated her for being so powerful. He wanted nothing but to crush her into pieces and finally regain his life that has been sold to her out of his cowardice.
🔸Editors' Feedback:
The content of Chapters 1 and 2 seems a bit too repetitive with a lot of overlap.
When choosing the "Chasing Her Apollo" mainline, one should focus on the plot of how the female lead takes the initiative in chasing after the male-lead.
From this kind of story, readers can see and relate to her dominance and her courage even when faced with great adversity, she takes charge and pursues her lover, despite a difference in identity, social status, occupation, and family background between them.
In this story, it isn't clear how the female protagonist pursues her lover and how, in fact she's the one in charge, with the power.
It will be better to modify and make it more apparent how she's the one chasing him to conform to this mainline for the contest.