🔸Author: Ya’aburnee
🔸Title: Vampire Girls School
🔹Editors' Feedback:
The author has created a diverse cast of characters with unique personalities and backgrounds in a Vampire World. Emma's rebellious nature and Ray's integrity and kindness add contrast to their characters, while Mina and Norman's relationship provides a refreshing dynamic. The evil Queen's desire for power and Dimian's complexity of personality also make them intriguing characters.
The introduction covered the basic situation of each character, such as Emma's discovery of the secret at Eden Girls' School and Ray's experimentation to become a vampire. The growth and change of the characters are shown in the story, such as in Emma's transformation from a rebellious student to a determined fighter against the vampires. The small personality details, such as Mina's strength and Norman's kind heart, also make the characters more memorable.
However, one potential weakness in the character design is that the characters' traits and motivations may feel clichéd or predictable. Additionally, while the characters do face dilemmas, adding more complexity and conflicts to the character relationships would make the story even more engaging.
🔸Author: Ole
🔸Title: Fleeing Royal Court
🔹Editors' Feedback:
The characters created by the author are well-developed, with distinct personalities, motivations, and conflicts, which may make for a compelling story.
The use of contrasting character traits between Princess Zaria and King Vincent creates potential for interesting conflict. And the supporting characters Princess Sarika, add depth to the story and provide additional sources of conflict.
However, one potential shortcoming in the direction of character development is that it seems somewhat predictable and formulaic. For example, Princess Zaria's development involves learning not to trust blindly and to think before acting, while King Vincent's growth involves learning to be patient and humble. While these are certainly important lessons, they may feel somewhat expected.
Then if increase the multi-faceted development performance of the character, it may add the realism or complexity of the characters' journeys.
🔸Author: Francesca Anthony
🔸Title: Diamond girl
🔹Editors' Feedback:
This setting of this story covers a world with supernatural beings living among humans. The concept of werewolves, vampires, witches, and hunters coexisting in an imaginary world is intriguing.
Regarding the character designs, there is a lot to discuss.
The main characters, Alice and Dennis, are well-defined with details attached. Alice's tragic past and her desire to break free from her wicked aunt make her a sympathetic character. Dennis' struggle to win Alice's love and protect his pack adds depth to his character. Being allergic to the sliver is also a feature that may make this character impressive.
However, the characters lacked some depth in their personalities and growth throughout the story. While Alice's fear and confusion about the existence of werewolves were understandable, her character development could have been more nuanced. Similarly, while Dennis' desire to find his Luna and start a family was a good motivation, his hatred against human lacks a sounding reason.
Additionally, the side characters in the story are interesting and add depth to the world the author has created. Nevertheless, it feels that some of them lacked development and were not fully utilized. It would have been great to see more exploration of their personalities and how they impacted the main characters' growth.
Overall, with some additional attention to details and character development, this work could be even more engaging.