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Editors' Feedback from SWA IV Courses Pt.1

June 1, 2023

🔸Author: Ole

🔸Title: Fleeing Royal Court

🔹Editors' Feedback:

This outline provides a clear introduction to the story's background, important characters, and plot. And the motivations and goals of the characters are well-defined, creating a logical progression of events that are linked by cause and effect.

However, it would be better if more obstacles are set in the story. This will help create more tension and suspense to draw readers' attention. For example, you could introduce external conflicts such as political unrest or a rival kingdom threatening war, or internal conflicts such as personal doubts or triangle-love. These obstacles can add depth to the story and provide opportunities for character development.


🔸Author: LISSOM

🔸Title: SHE'S MINE

🔹Editors' Feedback:

This is a very detailed outline, worthy of recognition.

First of all, the title "SHE'S MINE" points out the theme, but it is too concise. If you add a specific phrase, for example, "The Bad Boy's Claim: SHE'S MINE", the story will be more prominent.

Secondly, the CHARACTERS column has clarified age, appearance, personality, and life experience, which is good.

Third, and the biggest problem in this outline. BLURB, it should be called the plot here. It's actually way too detailed, and pretty much lists all the events that happened throughout the story. For the plot, you only need to name the most important events that can clarify the core of the story, and list the emotional relationship between the main characters. The beginning, development, turning point, climax, and resolution, each point usually has only one or two events.


🔸Author: And Wish Hope

🔸Title: I BURIED MY MATE

🔹Editors' Feedback:

The outline provides a comprehensive development and lineage of the plot, including the challenges faced by the main characters and their solutions. The character growth path of the protagonists is filled with obstacles, creating a compelling character arc. The heroine's transformation from a naive and lively Lycan's daughter to a fugitive who works hard to become stronger after being betrayed overnight by her lover is particularly inspiring.

However, some plot points in the story are not well-developed, and some details are inconsistent and unclear. Additionally, the secondary characters are underdeveloped, lacking sufficient information about them. Finally, the romantic relationship between the hero and heroine is not well-highlighted in the second half of the story, lacking some romantic elements.